What grade are you in? I'm sorry to say this, but it was very hard to read.
This is probably too late, but here goes...
Originally Posted by orange7
Jackson and Sleigh argue that “many people directly affected by the TGD will become worse off… and some may never recover socially or economically” (225) because the compensation to those who voluntary resettle is inadequate.
Voluntarily, not voluntary.
However, if the government make better compensation, then crop growers should move into the urban area and give their children the opportunity to enrol in school.
I think "made" would be the proper tense.
And don't finish your paragraph with "aren't", a contraction. It sounds very informal.