[Octopus]

Hi, Im Jonathan. Im just promoting my self as a DJ. Here, I believe is my best song. Im open for any ideas, constructive criticism, and tips on how to improve my songs. Thanks

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XhpMz7DvhxU

[Ulic Qel-Droma]

sound's very late 90's retro electronic happy euro dance. how old are you?

[TOS'd]

http://www.revscene.net/forums/djade-t605563.html?t=605563

SOoo......in that thread you say he, DJade, is your friend. And in this thread you say you are him? Song still sucks btw.

[raygunpk]

HAHAHA what a joke

[Kim Jong Un]

Time to save this thread,
Nammer style!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yt_dRH9-m5w&playnext_from=TL&videos=1oiKTp_lH0A

[unit]

jeezus i thought i was listening to basshunter for a sec

[nabs]

too oldschool ugly to be good, too busy, annoying. very annoying..

constructive critisism... try using non generic hi-hats, remove the horn, use another instrument... try a lower bpm.. eq ur kick, its really annoying.

to much echo, the track is too linear, not enough depth. ECHO does not mean Depth.

count your bars please, they are off in a few places, makes the track sound very odd.

overall track needs to be re-worked in terms of EQ.



good for a first try though..




ps. plz do not add vocals.

[eurochevy]

im pretty sure i could have made that beat or something close to it on my phone..im sorry but constructive criticism = i feel likei jumped back in time almost 15 years...maybe take a step back and listen to some new stuff from different artists see what everyones been putting out the last year or 2 and see the trend that has followed over the past 10 years

[eurochevy]

Time to save this thread,
Nammer style!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yt_dRH9-m5w&playnext_from=TL&videos=1oiKTp_lH0A

i just laughed so f'ing hard LOLOL

[filth]

sounds like 90s

[bcrdukes]

Let me get this straight.

Are you trying to promote yourself as a DJ, music producer or both? Having been in the industry a while back, you're going to need to figure that out first because as of right now, I have no clue as to what you're trying to do.

Secondly, I don't know what your musical background is but after listening to your track, you need to take some lessons in basic/elementary music composition.

[Jer3]

melody sounds like a ripoff of east clubbers lol.

[Armind]

Gives me a headache -_-

[FN-2199]

It's like somebody's constantly farting out of a horn and clapping at the same time.

[Mr.Jay]

^ good description

[1exotic]

fl studio = not real music...

annoying song.

[bcrdukes]

This is something that would be playing when I get my haircut at the Vietnamese hair salon I go to. :lol

[Vansterdam]

It's like somebody's constantly farting out of a horn and clapping at the same time.

/thread

:lol

[Ulic Qel-Droma]

i didnt intend to bash him, it's probably very beginner stuff.

i can see him taking the main melody and turning it into something better.

i think he just needs practice and to grow out of the rave sounding thing. it's a very young sound. only kids like that stuff.

[yellowpower]

A State of Trance. Look it up and LEARN

[vafanculo]

I like it. I think you need better transitioning between changes of melody and the symbol/clapping sound towards the end makes it seem like you are using a cheap soundboard, also doesn't go well with the rest of the song- take it out. Also the ending could of been a bit more fluent.

Does seem a little oldschoolish but there's nothing wrong with that if the song is good. Reminds me of Alice DJ.

It's easy to throw comments like it sucks or you are crap. People forget you aren't born to be at tiesto level- rather you work hard to get there.
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[The_AK]

song is boring, has the generic techno sound to it... nothing special, missing vocals that say "Pump the bass" or something similar...


He's just a friendd... Yea, it should have more vocals, maybe more effects then i think it would be great.

Thats not what i meant...

[BlackZRoadster]

maybe u should have spell checked first, u spelled comment commnet

[The_AK]

maybe u should have spell checked first, u spelled comment commnet

hes referencing skytech, lol

[Leparto]

this is mediocre happy hardcore either go mainstream, hardstyle, or go home

[Vansterdam]

listening to this song again it mightof been crazy.... back in 1999 lol

[Octopus]

A State of Trance. Look it up and LEARN
ASOT 450 with Sebastian Brandt.
I listen to ASOT alot.

[TOS'd]

ASOT 450 with Sebastian Brandt.
I listen to ASOT alot.

I guess it's going in one ear and out the other..

[JLASA]

It's like somebody's constantly farting out of a horn and clapping at the same time.

i just lol'ed so hard @ the comment/nammer video.


this sounds too generic and old school....

[Bonjour]

Get better sounds and use effects but practice more....before you promote it lol
A good song has much more that a melody and beat that song had no variation at all

[turb0fr3ak]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=el8frVS1yjg&feature=related
did you use this program?
lulz